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I've posted it a few places where there's a lot of DnD/TTRPG players, and they seemed to like it. Been really trying to find a place where actual lawyers can rip it apart, though. Every legal subreddit I've looked at won't allow it.

Gotcha, sorry about that. Didn't use the workshop because it's way too long to put in a post (the long document itself is 62 pages right now).

Understandable. Unfortunately, the code of regulations alone is 62 pages. If it makes you feel any better, here's a video of me clicking (link deleted)

Hopefully it's okay to post this here. But I'm a former IRS agent who fell in love with tax research. I'm also an aspiring fantasy writer. Somewhere along the way, I decided to combine the two, and begin to write in-depth magical legalese, including an entire code of regulations. I've posted it...

That's a good point. My story definitely focuses on the principles and belief behind these characters, but still wanted the character themselves to be satirical versions of real ones, ya know? And Vought refers to Russell Vought. He's the current head of the Office of Management and Budget in...

Thanks! It's more satirical, like Discworld. And I guess I'm still trying to figure out if I want her ideology to revolve around wanting to free dark magic so it can restore balance to the realm, or something else. I think it might be interesting to have her as more of a morally grey character...

I feel like I definitely should've mentioned that I was thinking of adding this character anyways! The story was always about critiquing Trump, Musk, and Vought, and it didn't feel right to not have that Vought-like character. Female or not, I was likely going to add this character. But lack of...

Well, I mean, that's literally what my story is about 🤷‍♂️ Edit: Don't really feel like I could give proper context without telling the inspiration behind the characters.

Hey, so I'm writing a fantasy story that is supposed to be one big critique on the current administration's in America. Trump, Musk, Mike Johnson, all of them. I posted my proposed query letter below online, and some people pointed out that I don't really have any female representation -- and I...

Funny you mention Karate Kid. Like Daniel, wanted to have the Dark One get frustrated at my executioner's teaching methods. He makes him log each mock execution, fill out forms, practice the movements over and over, etc. But the Dark One is dark, and craves real blood...

In leaning toward that as well, I'm just unsure if it's a good story -- especially since they're both on the run, so not sure how much practice he can get being an executioner, lol.

I prefer happy endings, and my protagonist is the executioner. Antagonist is the regent

Basically, I have a story that takes place in a society where prophecies are not really a bit deal, and are handled procedurally. Over hundreds/thousands of years, society has figured out how to identify Dark Ones and summarily execute them with great efficiency and speed (like any functioning...

Good point. I'm still leaning toward #1, but I wonder if I could somehow mix the two. Want it to sound real, and pompous, and super academic.

Appreciate the feedback, thanks! Guess I never realized how much of a difference using Latin words makes!