Recent content by Banespawn

How much of the story is represented by 1-11 and how much by #12? I don't get a sense from any of this that the characters have actual goals that they are pursuing. Is the story supposed to be about her efforts to escape from the underworld? Is ending up there the inciting incident? If so...

I'm one of those who vehemently dislikes starting with a pronoun (when writing in 3rd person), and I take exception to the implication that starting with the character's name is somehow a sign of bad or generic writing. My objection to starting with he/she is twofold. One, it adds nothing to...

I couldn't find a way to do it on this site, but I was able to do it in Scrivener, clip the screenshot of it, then paste the image here. Not a great solution, but it works.

The analogy doesn't work, IMO. We are told that he isn't usually curious, but then his curiosity is compared to things with a high degree of permanence. Maybe he'll lose weight, and maybe he'll wear different clothing, but I don't see him getting taller any time soon. That all suggests that he...