Recent content by Seven Crowns

I'm big on grammar. I have many, many books which I've read. But like everyone else has said, you don't really think about it as you write. You've already internalized the structures your voice needs. Your words had better be grammatically correct when you finish though, so it takes many careful...

Finished Expedition 33. I had a choice of endings. I suppose everyone does, but because I powered up a certain character to absurd extremes, I had to go with that one in the final showdown. What a depressing ending, but . . . I uninstalled the game because I really need to be doing something...

Kind of bummed. Bad month all around. If I seem my usual happy self, it's mostly forced. I seek out songs I like. This was one of my favorite slower Ozzy songs. Still has lots of ozzyisms in it, which makes it kind of funny, but . . . yeah. Here's an excellent version of this song! Every one...

These guys always make me laugh. "I have to hit the note with an excavator." And he did. haha!

Getting psyched for the new Igorrr album, and you are too! haha. I know it's coming. Too many singles being dropped. Also waiting for Nevermore and Old Man's Child, two bands I thought were lost.

My favorite Ozzy album, just barely.

:cry: Oh no. I've listened to thousands of hours of Ozzy. I'll listen to thousands more.

I think I know what you're talking about. The author starts writing everything in an immediate, as-it-happens state, and it comes off feeling like a diary which somehow trivializes the events. It's that first person perspective that traps you within the MC's senses. You start chronicling...

I saw the irascible guy again today. I waved at him. He nodded back, knowingly. He was terrorizing the neighborhood up on the east side. Teenagers peek out of their windows. They're scared because he owns these streets.

Today, I was going for a neighborhood stroll. I do a 4-mile loop. It takes a while. On mile three, while I was walking down the big road adjoining my neighborhood, this pudgy white-haired dude on a Rascal drives by me. He's not on the sidewalk. He's taking the right hand lane of traffic. This is...

1. Only one story per person. 2. You can submit your work elsewhere. The contest sub-forum is not publicly visible and so the work is still "unseen" by the net. I've seen publications state directly that they didn't care about this, and you can have stories in forums to be critiqued / edited...

"I wish I could play little league now. I'd be way better than before." — Mitch Hedberg

I like it. It's evocative. I'd sort it like so . . . Clothes discarded, done actively, not as a description Move quickly to the character, which you've naturally done Move to the setting to explain that the pool is near the ocean End on her thought. Vhairi let her biohazard suit crumple to the...

Cool. What was the contest prompt?