Recent content by ellekaldwin

I like this character too. He could be maybe a former mentor/friend to Locke whom Locke corrupted with his evil, dastardly plans for world domination (or something like that) or maybe they matched each other's levels of evil and bounced off each other. I kinda like the idea of Locke just finding...

Okay, I changed a few lines and added one where Tala tries to look for them but there's no sign of either of them.

You're right! I knew something was off. Let me fix that and then it should be good.

I missed it too. I think all of the characters we started with (Rennie, Daiyu, Jian, Tala, Shaohua and now Min and Bertrand) are all main characters in their own ways. Rennie and Jian stand out because I think they're the defacto 'leaders' of the group. It took a while for all of them to finally...

New entry is up! I wrote it kinda quickly and feel like there's something missing with it, but I hope it's okay. Excited to see how this goes!

Tala had never liked caves. In the forests of home, darkness was soft; cedar-shadow, salmon-river gloom, the kind she could press a palm into and feel life breathing back. But this darkness was different. It wasn’t made by trees. It was made by stone and old hunger. It tasted like iron filings...

!!! Sorry I didn't realize. If I get it written before Monday, am I okay to post it?

Hey quick question is it my turn?

What a first line that is! That would grab me too and I'm adding that book to my TBR list.

You're always so kind about my writing, but I'm only as good as my fellow role players! The story would be nothing without you! I do the same thing sometime and go through books and read the first lines. I'll do that and maybe read the last line haha and try and imagine how the book ends.

Thank you for sharing those examples! Orwell was a master at those powerful opening lines that grab the reader immediately. Another author that I think is Ursula K. Le Guin and Kurt Vonnegut. Also thank you for sharing that there's a whole contest about this! I snorted into my tea while reading...

I think you're right in that people need to be confident about what they want to write and not put too much pressure on the first line. I'm the kind of writer where I'll rewrite a single sentence over and over until it's perfect but 'perfect' is an arbitrary measure that I'll never be able to...

Yes that sounds super cool and will be a great addition to the story!

I’ve been thinking a lot about first lines of novels, short stories, or really anything. They can be an instant hook, or a tasty little preview of the opening paragraph that locks in the tone. But I also feel like that puts so much pressure on me to nail the perfect first line, the one that...

Yes! I can write up a character profile ASAP. Sorry for the late reply. I gotta get back into the habit of checking here daily. The holidays and getting the flu got me all out of wack