The History of the Kroot

[Calixtus]

Hi, I wrote a fanfiction based on the alien species of Warhammer 40,000, by the name of Kroot, titled, The History of the Kroot. I would like a second opinion and such, because it has been heavily criticised and shot down, mainly for my style of prose, which is closer to how people wrote in the past, long run-on sentences, which is my preference. I of course can write in short sentences too, but I have a name for them, when they are too short to have actual substance, "segmented lines".

Here it is: Link deleted by moderator - for crit post the work in the workshop

 

[Naomasa298]

Hi, I wrote a fanfiction based on the alien species of Warhammer 40,000, by the name of Kroot, titled, The History of the Kroot. I would like a second opinion and such, because it has been heavily criticised and shot down, mainly for my style of prose, which is closer to how people wrote in the past, long run-on sentences, which is my preference. I of course can write in short sentences too, but I have a name for them, when they are too short to have actual substance, "segmented lines".

Here it is: Link deleted by moderator - for crit post the work in the workshop

Just in case you haven't had a PM from the mods, you need to post work for critique in the Workshop. Also, I believe you can't link to an external file - you need to post the text on the forum (someone can correct me if I'm wrong).

The optimum length to receive critique is around 2000-3000 words, so if your work is longer than that, it's best to post an excerpt, especially seeing as you mainly want critique on the style.

 

[Calixtus]

Hi Naomasa298! I posted in Workshop already, with the Google doc external link. Do I need to post excerpts instead? Thanks for telling me, and let's talk in the proper forum.