I love it! I love your style of storytelling. And I am so excited to have Saran join the story!
It's perfect. Not too fast. You did an excellent job capturing Shan's character.
I had no problem, I think it's fine.
edits made.
Thank you so much for such a fantastic entry into the story!!
Couple of questions -
Does the Alphabet Society know that Olive is Sophia, princess of the Southern Continent, Queen Cassandra’s and King Anicetus’ daughter?
Have we ever had a description of Alpha with his hood down?
A conversation my niece (the nurse) had with a patient at her Boston hospital -
The patient said, "You're not from around here. Where are you from?"
My niece answered, "Canada."
The patient replied, "Ya I can tell, your mannerisms are different and you're kind and polite ... definitely not...
I had an uncle who rolled his own cigarettes.
That reminds me of a catchy tune from 1947 - Smoke! Smoke! Smoke! - Tex Williams in the "talking blues" style of singing