No, that's not the challenge. You have to make it work as a haiku in Japanese. You have the retain the 5-7-5 mora form.
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No, that's not the challenge. You have to make it work as a haiku in Japanese. You have the retain the 5-7-5 mora form.
An elderly friend, who is no longer with us, was a gifted writer of haiku. She spoke of it with reverence. Her attitude rubbed off on me, though at best I am less than a hack. I wandered around the internet in search of information that Katherine might have approved of. Came up with THIS for you.
17 syllables, or 5-7-5 is a Western reduction of the haiku form. Traditional haiku is not about counting syllables, and is often/usually shorter that what we would thing of as 17 syllables. 12 to 14 syllables is probably more common, as in 4-6-4 or 3-6-3. Poets study for years to master the haiku form. Here are some of the guiding priciples:
1. A haiku always has a season word.
2. The entire poem should create a balance, or paradox, like two side of a coin.
3. The turn or "kiriji" is essential. The kiriji can come down to a single word, the "cut" word
4. The end of the haiku resolves with the opening in some kind of contrast.
just realized I misspoke in this, I meant in POV. For example, do you dream as though it's through your eyes or like you're watching a movie?
I didn't realize there were all of these nuances that went into this style of poetry. This is very neat to know.
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Dots of colour sprout
in green grass and lazy clouds
run the summer long.
in green grass and lazy clouds
run the summer long.
That would technically be objective POV. Just saying.
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In a traditional Japanese haiku, it's about counting 17 mora - that's a sound unit, not a syllable. A mora maps on to each Japanese kana - one kana = 1 morae, even if it is a compound kana.
For example, the surname Inoue - two syllables in English, four morae in Japanese - i-no-u-e, いのうえ.
Maples sprang sap lines
Snowbanks are full of sugar
Who will run the pump?
Snowbanks are full of sugar
Who will run the pump?
Just bcuz.
蝉うたう
法師の読経
箸のおと
semi utau
houshi no dokyou
hashi no oto
The cicadas sing
Monks chanting holy sutras
A click of chopsticks
You might have to be familiar with Japanese culture to quite get what I am referring to at the end though.
蝉うたう
法師の読経
箸のおと
semi utau
houshi no dokyou
hashi no oto
The cicadas sing
Monks chanting holy sutras
A click of chopsticks
You might have to be familiar with Japanese culture to quite get what I am referring to at the end though.
I guess it is funerals where relatives pick bones with chopsticks from ashes. Why else there is monks involved.
If that is correct guess. Then maybe the emotional part is a gratitude to a died person to wait over winter until ground is unfrozen. though it contradicts the cremation vs burial. Or else why cicadas are involved, must be a summertime. Seeing some of Buddhist custom, I guess the scenery is indoors, unlikely chants are happening outdoors. So that makes acoustics explained. Overall the contrast is that life goes on.
Yes, that's correct.
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This is maybe the first haiku I ever read and has stuck in my head for half a century. I copied it in several different forms below.
The one I remember is first.
The spring rain;
Silly little girl
You can't teach that cat to dance.
Harusame ya neko ni odori wo oshieru ko
Spring rain ya cat with dance wo teaches child
Spring rain;
The little girl teaches the cat
To dance.
The spring rain;
a little girl teaches
the cat to dance.
Other Issa Haiku translations
The one I remember is first.
The spring rain;
Silly little girl
You can't teach that cat to dance.
Harusame ya neko ni odori wo oshieru ko
Spring rain ya cat with dance wo teaches child
Spring rain;
The little girl teaches the cat
To dance.
The spring rain;
a little girl teaches
the cat to dance.
Other Issa Haiku translations
Ha ha thank you. I have now identified the author for my avatar's signature line inspiration.
Climb Mount Fuji,
O snail,
but slowly, slowly.
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I know that Chicago is considered one of the Holy Cities of frankfurters (which incidently, I've never encountered in Frankfurt, Germany). And there is a variety of hot dog made with veal and pork that's available in western New York called a "coney" or a "red hot," depending on the region. In Syracuse, Hyde's is considered the gold standard of that variety. I sure wish I could get them here on the West Coast. Actually you can, if you want to pay to have them packed in dry ice.
Like all culinary Chicago things.... highly overrated. They can keep their pizza too.
The RI dog is the NY System wiener, but it's more popular here than in New York, I think. Could be some proportionality thing. You could fit the entire population of RI into a few square miles of Brooklyn.
ooooh, gotcha. That's nice to know.
I think I appreciate haiku better now than I did ten minutes ago.
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