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[Rad Scribbler]

I made the 'Boomer' generation by 1 year (1963) - don't know whether it's a good or bad thing.

 

[Rath Darkblade]

Agreed ... yeah ... so, essentially certain people decided that I and people either 16 years older or 4 years younger than me all fall under the same dysfunctional category under the label "Gen X".

Yeah, we used to hate these people. Now we just make fun of 'em. It's more effective that way.

 

[Louanne Learning]

I went outside this morning and was pleasantly surprised by how warm it is, 13 C - spring is in the air!

 

[Rath Darkblade]

In contrast, I'm sitting at my computer. It's 1:10am. And I've been up since 6:40am yesterday.

I'm going to bed. Night! Zzzzzzzzz ...

 

[ps102]

I went outside this morning and was pleasantly surprised by how warm it is, 13 C - spring is in the air!

I'm so happy winter is basically over. The almond tree in the yard is in the process of sprouting leaves, the days have grown longer, and less clouds cover the sky. I love spring so much.

 

[Louanne Learning]

Me, too! It's definitely my favourite season

 

[Homer Potvin]

I'm having a hell of a time getting the tone right for this one scene in my WIP. It's been largely lighthearted and humorous so far but now there's a death scene that has to be dealt with and it's playing like an off-flavor.

 

[Trish]

I'm having a hell of a time getting the tone right for this one scene in my WIP. It's been largely lighthearted and humorous so far but now there's a death scene that has to be dealt with and it's playing like an off-flavor.

I hate that. Hope it clears up soon for you.

 

[Homer Potvin]

I hate that. Hope it clears up soon for you.

It'll be fine. I just have to massage the tones on either side of it. Opening arc of a rough draft so I'm not too worried about it. 8K words is barely a baby bump. I probably need to get deeper to get a better sense of where the balance lies. Another issue is the single POV. Normally I would align certain tones with certain characters and hand off the scenes accordingly, but that's not an option.

 

[Trish]

It'll be fine. I just have to massage the tones on either side of it. Opening arc of a rough draft so I'm not too worried about it. 8K words is barely a baby bump. I probably need to get deeper to get a better sense of where the balance lies. Another issue is the single POV. Normally I would align certain tones with certain characters and hand off the scenes accordingly, but that's not an option.

Single POV is my jam, lol. Is it first person? Or close 3rd or something?

 

[Homer Potvin]

Single POV is my jam, lol. Is it first person? Or close 3rd or something?

Laser close 3rd. So much so that the character's thoughts are almost disconnected from the action. It might end up trending toward a minor character narrator who is the least interesting person in each scene who reports his thoughts on the plot rather than participate directly. Kind of like the Chief in Cuckoo's Nest with more agency. Not really sure yet. It's an 8K owrd problem, but I don't I want it to be become a 30K problem.

 

[Trish]

Laser close 3rd. So much so that the character's thoughts are almost disconnected from the action. It might end up trending toward a minor character narrator who is the least interesting person in each scene who reports his thoughts on the plot rather than participate directly. Kind of like the Chief in Cuckoo's Nest with more agency. Not really sure yet. It's an 8K owrd problem, but I don't I want it to be become a 30K problem.

That makes sense, and figuring it out now will definitely save a lot of headache in the future.

 

[Louanne Learning]

It's only 12:15? And I have got no writing done yet...

 

[Homer Potvin]

That makes sense, and figuring it out now will definitely save a lot of headache in the future.

I've been using the narrative summary as a proxy for a POV pull back but it might make more sense stretch to pull back on the POV itself. I don't know. So far I've liked the idea of the direct thoughts in the narrative without italics or attributes, and then attributed thoughts in the narrative summary. It's working well until a particular scene calls for a different tone. I can write around most of the plot things that would bring any of that into conflict, but the MC finding his friend dead is the capstone to the inciting incident arc, so it can't be avoided. The closest thing I can think of is when Eddie Murphy finds his bestie dead in Beverly Hills Cop, which doesn't really interrupt the jokes. You can turn a tone on a dime in cinema, though. A change in music and a few plaintive facial expressions and the job is done.

 

[Set2Stun]

Just tried recording a flash story that will be on Australian radio and a podcast next month, but even while completely alone I am somehow self-conscious about it. Very silly. I'll give it another shot this evening after I've deposited a few alcoholic drinks.

 

[Louanne Learning]

I've deposited a few alcoholic drinks.

My man!

 

[Rigor Mortis]

Just as well we have a beer reaction thing! Be sure to send location for the podcast when it's ready and best of luck.

 

[ps102]

Just tried recording a flash story that will be on Australian radio and a podcast next month

Pro tip, the closer you are to the microphone, the deeper your voice becomes. It gives it more oomph as you Canadians say.

But you need a pop filter to avoid... pops. Pro tip 2: Any thin fabric you have lying around can act as a pop filter.

 

[Louanne Learning]

more oomph as you Canadians say.

we are big on oomph

 

[Trish]

Just tried recording a flash story that will be on Australian radio and a podcast next month, but even while completely alone I am somehow self-conscious about it. Very silly. I'll give it another shot this evening after I've deposited a few alcoholic drinks.

Good luck!