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Welcome to the forum, Logos. Always happy to see new folks wander in.
It's a classic scenario, so a lot depends on how it develops.
It's a classic scenario, so a lot depends on how it develops.
Yeah, it's still too vague to know, huh?
Yep. I want to know why the kingdom is up for grabs and what the princess thinks about being treated like a prize sow in a spitting match for macho brawlers. Is the underdog seeking to free the princess with no other thought of reward, or are his motives the same as those of the overcats: power, riches, and a chance to take sexual advantage of a woman who in all likelihood is an unwilling pawn? Does the princess have some tricks up her sleeve?
But right now, these questions need to be used to further develop the plot and world. At the moment, you have 1 line of plot. When in fact, one might want a whole page or two of plot to begin. I have been starting stories lately with 'scene lists' where there are scenes I WANT in the story and then using that to create a plot outline that include many of the scenes I want. Anyway, I think this story needs some expansion and development before anyone can say for certain if it is something they want to read.
However, no matter what, your story should be something you want to read.
You do know I know the plot line already, I just was proposing the premise, right?
And yes, I would buy 10 copies of it if it were on the shelf, so I could read it over and over again for the first time!
No, it sounded as if you were testing out to see if the premise/plot would interest people before you write it. Which is not something I would advise doing as everyone has different tastes and you cannot write for other people. You can ONLY write for yourself or your writing will not be genuine to who you are. As for the plot, the premise informs what the plot will be. To me, they are the same thing and I feel like the premise you gave needs to be grown in the greenhouse a bit longer before you start telling tomatoes. You need to figure out the world and characters and reasons behind the way the world is, like @CatrionaGrace said.
That's great. I am glad you like the plot of your own work so well. Just know that it's not my cup of tea, but I will support you in writing the story you want.
Agreed. I think there should be a unique spin on it. If I were you, I would have it where it is NOT the women who are the prizes, but the men. Because women in 'story world' need to know their children come from 'strong, good men'. The societal flip of men having to prove themselves can cause a lot of inter-story politics and stuff. I think flipping this around could be interesting. Because I haven't seen it done before.
I got this. No need to meddle.
If only you knew my whole story. When Brad Pitt was handed "Se7en", his first response was, "Another detective story? Meh." But his agent urged him, "Read this one!" That's basically my story here. The ending will BLOW your mind, like "The Usual Suspects" or "The Sixth Sense".
Then why did you even ask for thoughts on your story? You asked for thoughts and I gave them to you. I am not meddling, I am doing what writers do and that's brainstorm with other writers.
I understand that. But I am highly skeptical right now, but I am sure you will like the ending. However, like I said before, it is not the kind of story I wish to read. But I wish you well on your writing journey.
I didn't ask for advice. I asked how many would read it based on the idea.
You should still read it. Show your support for other members, ya know.
That's fair. But you did not clarify the details of the plot, you just said, 'this is cool! Read it, Man.'. I am a picky reader and want to know more about the plot and characters. I mean, I could just tell you, "I have a sci-fi story about this boy who wants to be a pilot and fight in space battles and he has to destroy the government." Which IS in fact, the plot of Star Wars. But without the details, it sounds weird and boring.
No thank you. It is better that I don't. I am a harsh critic.
One or two since I joined. Go read my critiques.
Why are you trying to discredit me and my idea? I'm new here. I don't know you. Why are you right away out to get me??
I can take harsh criticism.
@Luxuria - I asked if you would read the story based on the idea, but instead of answering, you:
- Started giving me unsolicited advice
- Meddled into my affairs or my process
- Start nitpicking me and my efforts
Some welcome I've gotten here! Just joined and I'm being grossly disrespected, publicly!
- Started giving me unsolicited advice
- Meddled into my affairs or my process
- Start nitpicking me and my efforts
Some welcome I've gotten here! Just joined and I'm being grossly disrespected, publicly!
Homer and I have a policy of second chances for those who were banned from the original site, some people might have had reasons for the behaviour which no longer apply, others may have been banned years ago and grown up since...multiple options. But when someone shows up here and starts immediately reprising the behaviour that led to their original encounter with the hammer of doom, then it is clear that they learnt nothing from the experience and if they have aged, it is not like a fine wine, but like milk.
In those circumstances they are again shown the door, we do second chances, we don't do thirds. Noli me vexare, Logos abi hinc
In those circumstances they are again shown the door, we do second chances, we don't do thirds. Noli me vexare, Logos abi hinc
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