It Began in a Tavern (OOC Thread) (Part 2)

[ps102]

Also @ps102 and @Louanne Learning, is it okay if I cause some comedy chaos? Arspeth showing up at the tavern and not recognising them? Like, an amazing amount of chaos?

I think it's okay to have some comedy relief every once in a while, but I agree with Louanne that we need to be very consistent with tone.

This is especially important because we don't have much room. In July alone, we made only 4 posts, so our current pace is twice as slow as I originally calculated. At this rate, it will take more than two years to finish this. That's quite long for what is essentially a first draft.

The story needs to move forward as much as possible, so although your post was nice, we might not be able to afford it if we care about finishing the project. Remember that right now, you're essentially writing once a month for this, so what you do needs to count towards the finish line.

I feel bad talking about progress because I myself have been slow, so I sound rather hypocritical, but it is true.

I think we need to concentrate on using the prompts given in previous entries to help direct the story.

I think this is a good idea.

Also, the Queen is in possession of a mysterious, old and beaten violin.

Hint: That's the same violln Olive sees in her dreams.

 

[Louanne Learning]

The story needs to move forward as much as possible, so although your post was nice, we might not be able to afford it if we care about finishing the project.

I agree. Let's not go off on any more tangents that do not add to the plotline, but rather distract from it.

so I sound rather hypocritical,

Not at all. You have added to the story immensely.

 

[ps102]

I agree. Let's not go off on any more tangents that do not add to the plotline, but rather distract from it.

I'm also in agreement with that. Speaking of the plotline, is everyone on the same page about what happens at Cliffcross? We discussed that at length in the beginning of summer.

 

[Louanne Learning]

is everyone on the same page about what happens at Cliffcross?

Could you refresh my memory?

 

[Luxuria]

Could you refresh my memory?

Yes, please. I also think we should make a collective outline of the plot to Cliffcross so we have less wandering.

 

[ps102]

Could you refresh my memory?

It's been a while but in summary, I remember the following elements:

• There should be a battle between the Queen and Olive
• Everything goes horribly wrong for the girls
• Ravenna almost dies (and I remember there was talk of Barnabas saving her)
• Barnabas starts to convert sides because he doesn't like what he sees (maybe he finds the Queen to be too brutal and nihilistic?)

There was talk of ending everything at Cliffcross, but then we agreed that it should simply be a point where Olive attempts to win but fails to spectacularly. She almost dies.

We're at the midpoint, and it's typical for the midpoint to contain a moment where something really bad happens to the main characters. In this case, it's the first confrontation against the queen ending in complete failure. It's the second confrontation (the one that happens at the climax of the third act) that sees them succeed. Though it should be something much more interesting than just a fight.

So our aim right now is to get them over to Cliffcross where Pria and the others are. That said, I have no idea how they fit into all of this. Does @IgnitedxSoul have any plans? But regardless, we really don't have time to waste, so we need to get them there as quickly as possible because we've been trying to do so since Easter, I believe.

 

[ps102]

I also think we should make a collective outline of the plot to Cliffcross so we have less wandering.

I think it's good enough to have a synopsis (which we do) and just aim to stick to it without wandering away from the goal. A collective outline might work but we probably don't want there to be the same problem where something within the OOC thread controls plot points, so this is good enough.

If anyone wants to add anything to the above, now is the time.

 

[Louanne Learning]

It's been a while but in summary, I remember the following elements:

• There should be a battle between the Queen and Olive
• Everything goes horribly wrong for the girls
• Ravenna almost dies (and I remember there was talk of Barnabas saving her)
• Barnabas starts to convert sides because he doesn't like what he sees (maybe he finds the Queen to be too brutal and nihilistic?)

There was talk of ending everything at Cliffcross, but then we agreed that it should simply be a point where Olive attempts to win but fails to spectacularly. She almost dies.

We're at the midpoint, and it's typical for the midpoint to contain a moment where something really bad happens to the main characters. In this case, it's the first confrontation against the queen ending in complete failure. It's the second confrontation (the one that happens at the climax of the third act) that sees them succeed. Though it should be something much more interesting than just a fight.

So our aim right now is to get them over to Cliffcross where Pria and the others are. That said, I have no idea how they fit into all of this. Does @IgnitedxSoul have any plans? But regardless, we really don't have time to waste, so we need to get them there as quickly as possible because we've been trying to do so since Easter, I believe.

Thanks for that. Yes, it's coming back to me now. These points should be our guides.

 

[Louanne Learning]

If anyone wants to add anything to the above, now is the time.

I just had a look at a note in my Tavern doc (made June 30) that lists the following points:
(I assume I copied it from this thread)

1. Olive must develop her powers further, which takes time
2. Ravenna, Katara and Olive must bond
3. Ravenna and Katara need some development as characters
4. Katara needs to learn of her father (shouldn't they meet with Dusca at one point)
5. Barnabas needs to convert sides
6. Melina and Olive will have a battle

 

[ps102]

1. Olive must develop her powers further, which takes time
2. Ravenna, Katara and Olive must bond
3. Ravenna and Katara need some development as characters
4. Katara needs to learn of her father (shouldn't they meet with Dusca at one point)
5. Barnabas needs to convert sides
6. Melina and Olive will have a battle

Thanks for that. I forgot about some of these. What if we were to make a little road map? It should be something that maps all these plot points to the three act model. So, for example, we can say that the defeat Olive suffers happens at the midpoint (act 2).

It doesn't have to be something extensive and massive, or even complete. It just has to be some lines of mapping text.

 

[Luxuria]

Thanks for that. I forgot about some of these. What if we were to make a little road map? It should be something that maps all these plot points to the three act model. So, for example, we can say that the defeat Olive suffers happens at the midpoint (act 2).

It doesn't have to be something extensive and massive, or even complete. It just has to be some lines of mapping text.

That sounds like a good idea! I like it. I enjoy writing out outlines, but would love help with this one.

 

[ps102]

That sounds like a good idea! I like it. I enjoy writing out outlines, but would love help with this one.

Well, the first step is everyone agreeing to the idea. Then, we'd have to collectively write it so everyone is happy.

 

[Luxuria]

Well, the first step is everyone agreeing to the idea. Then, we'd have to collectively write it so everyone is happy.

That sounds good!

 

[Luxuria]

Also, I need to skip my next turn as I am going to be busy with school work. But I will be here.

@IgnitedxSoul it's your turn currently.

 

[Louanne Learning]

Bossman and Gamma were working on something together. Should we revisit that plotline? Tie it in somehow?

Gamma did give guidance to Olive in the beginning...

 

[Luxuria]

Bossman and Gamma were working on something together. Should we revisit that plotline? Tie it in somehow?

Gamma did give guidance to Olive in the beginning...

Yes, they were working on something together. I am not sure what, but I know they were in on something. Maybe we'll discover that later?

 

[Luxuria]

Hey, can I possibly just delete my last RP Post? Because I agree. It does wander and doesn't add much to forward the plot. So, can I just remove it and decide to pass my turn?

 

[Louanne Learning]

So, can I just remove it and decide to pass my turn?

Can I encourage you to take a few days and perhaps replace it with something that continues from the threads that came before? It doesn't have to be long. How about a conversation between Gamma and Bossman? Or Barnabas and Dusca? Or a solitary reflection by Ravenna?

We'd be happy to help you in whatever way we can.

 

[Luxuria]

Can I encourage you to take a few days and perhaps replace it with something that continues from the threads that came before? It doesn't have to be long. How about a conversation between Gamma and Bossman? Or Barnabas and Dusca? Or a solitary reflection by Ravenna?

We'd be happy to help you in whatever way we can.

Okay, I will take a few days. I agree. Replacing it would be the best thing to do. I could write a scene with Bossman and Gamma. Maybe Gamma is aware of the shadow working with the queen and the two need to figure out how to stop it? Maybe that's what they do, so we a few smaller battles on the way. Thoughts?

 

[Louanne Learning]

Okay, I will take a few days

I'm so glad to hear this! Take your time. Read over posts if you need to. We are in this together!